Let me know your e-mail, and I'll lay down a track for you tonight if I get a chance and send it to you. IMO, the second line of the chorus needs to stay on the G at the end instead of returning to the D. I think that's the note you're trying to hit. And, the same with the third line at the end. And so, it will blend smoothly when you go back into the fourth line of the chorus to hit the G at it's beginning. But, if you think otherwise, Josh, I'll gladly submit, because it's you're song. And, you know a whole lot better what you're trying to sing then I do. The other addition I would consider is that, at the end of the chorus each time, you return to the same general chord progression that is contained within the verses. It will give a general smoothness and harmony to the song, allowing it to flow from one section to the next. But, again, this is just my own musical style, and I surely respect that of yours and others if it is different. I hope my thoughts are not viewed as critical, as I would view myself as honorable to have created such a melody and lyrics in the first place.

Blessings in our common Lord....

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Charles Plauger
Member/Grace Reformed Church
Oakland, MD